Will you please comment on this poem I have revised?

I enjoyed the lesson which this poem portrays. It is one of those rare moments when one is presented with such words of wisdom. I enjoyed the "Bounce" of the first two stanzas until the last three stanzas bring us back to the poems message. No doubt it was not intentional but it gives me two poems in one which I read as such. There are a few hiccups in the last three stanzas, fortunately they do not deter from the poems message which is it's most important feature.